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Post  Jennie on Wed Dec 07, 2011 7:22 am

Depending on homework and my level of drowsiness, the time in which I post new chapters will definitely vary. LOL but due to the minimal chapters I have written so far, chapter 3 might not be coming out soon until I've written more chapters. Yeah. That's how I roll :b haha I'll update this post every time I post a new chapter, so don't forget to check here for announcements! :D

If you have any questions, comments, or concerns regarding my new series The Age of Heroes, then be sure to spill your mind/heart out in this topic! xD Thanks! ♥ Love you guys~

Chapters Available:
~'Chapter 1'~
~'Chapter 2'~
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Corrective suggestion for your chapter 2.

Post  Rebeca1995 on Thu Dec 29, 2011 7:32 am

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~'Chapter 2'~

I walked in through the door of our small home and sat down in the recliner. “Kaitlyn, I miss Melanie…” I picked up and looked at our caretaker's picture that was on the table.

“I do too, Jennie dear. I, too, am puzzled by the fact that she would disappear like that. Six years ago, she put us into bed and then by the morning, she was mysteriously gone… We’re already sixteen and no trace of her has ever been found.”

I set down Melanie’s picture and then I walked over to Kaitlyn. We embraced each other for what seemed like five minutes or so until we were interrupted with a knocking at the door.

“Who could it be?” I wondered aloud.

Kaitlyn walked over to the door to open it. We saw a boy our age that was a couple of inches taller than us. He wore a casual jacket with a black t-shirt that had a logo of a punk-rock band name. It was arranged so creatively with colorful abstract designs. He had a black fedora on top of his head and he wore black pants with red-laced shoes.

“Hello there, how are you two ladies doing on this fine night?” the mysterious boy smiled at us.

“Wow. I can’t help but notice that you have a fedora… I like fedoras!” I giggled.

Kaitlyn rolled her eyes and lightly punched me in the arm. “Please excuse my fedora-obsessed friend. How can we help you?” Kaitlyn gave a light smile to the boy.

“Jennie and Kaitlyn, I presume?” My eyes widened immediately and I knew Kaitlyn was shocked also.

“How did this guy know our names?” I thought to myself.

“I’m here to tell you two about the story that was presented to the children earlier today.” He looked over at Kaitlyn. “You two have the birthmarks of the Legendary Heroes. That scroll talks of a true story and I’m only here to tell you that you two are part of the five that will defeat the Black Mage...”

Paragraphing Correction: Created paragraphing for chapter 2 of your story.
Grammar error: She was gone* mysteriously.

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Post  Jennie on Thu Dec 29, 2011 8:45 am

Oh, thank you! I was considering about changing how I form my chapters but I just didn't have time D:

By the way, "gone mysteriously" and "mysteriously gone" is the same thing... o.o

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Post  Rebeca1995 on Fri Dec 30, 2011 12:14 am

Jennie wrote:Oh, thank you! I was considering about changing how I form my chapters but I just didn't have time D:

By the way, "gone mysteriously" and "mysteriously gone" is the same thing... o.o

Yep, the chapters need to have paragraphing or it would be hard to read.
By the way, I only corrected it because it sounded convulsive to me. Checked it against Google, and found out that you're right. Sorry Jenny. :D

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Post  Jennie on Fri Dec 30, 2011 3:01 am

Lol it's okay ^.^

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Post  [Øฬภєг] ภιĞђтℓØяÐŽŽ on Sat Dec 31, 2011 4:01 am

lol

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Post  Centurial on Mon Jan 02, 2012 9:20 am

mamamiah T_T i have the most developed series here but too lazy to continue it.

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Post  Jennie on Tue Jan 03, 2012 9:38 am

Hahaha writer's block/laziness D; I'm considering about making another series, but I'd rather not since I barely just started this one lol

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Post  [Øฬภєг] ภιĞђтℓØяÐŽŽ on Sun Jan 08, 2012 11:11 am

lol

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